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The given chart provides information about the number of trips made by children in a particular country in the years 1990 and 2010 to travel to and from school using various way of transportation and gives the total number of trips per year.

The given chart provides information about the number of trips made by children in a particular country in the years 1990 and 2010 to travel to and from school using various way of transportation and gives the total number of trips per year. gkxA
The given chart provides information about the number of trips made by children in a particular country in the years 1990 and 2010 to travel to and from school using various way of transportation and gives the total number of trips per year. The range of transportation includes the travelling as car passenger, by walking, cycling, walking and using bus as well as only using bus for the children that are between five to twelve years old. Overall, it becomes clear that in comparison to the previous time period the transportation as a car passenger became the most common way of travelling for the majority of pupils whereas the number of trips per year that were done by walking dramatically declined. The remaining modes of transportation showed a similar reduction. Firstly, the chart shows that transportation as a car passenger skyrocketed from around 4 million in 1990 almost tripled to the levels of around 11 million trips per year. Secondly, it is obvious that the most common way of travelling for pupils was walking to and from the school in the year 1990. A majority (around 12 million) of trips were done using this mode of transport whereas in contrast nowadays this number halved and only around 6 million trips were made. On a similar scale the remaining modes of transport suffered a likewise decrease in trips.
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of
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trips
made by children in a particular country in the years 1990 and 2010 to travel to and from school using various way of
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transportation
and gives the total
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number
of
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trips
per
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year
. The range of
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transportation
includes the travelling as car passenger, by walking, cycling, walking and using bus
as well
as
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only
using bus for the children that are
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between five to twelve
years
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old
.

Overall
, it becomes
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clear
that
in comparison
to the previous time period the
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transportation
as a car passenger became the most common way of travelling for the majority of pupils whereas the
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number
of
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trips
per
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year
that
were done
by walking
dramatically
declined. The remaining modes of
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transportation
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showed
a similar reduction.

Firstly
, the chart
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shows
that
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transportation
as a car passenger skyrocketed from
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around
4
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million
in 1990 almost tripled to the levels of
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around
11
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million
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trips
per year.

Secondly
, it is obvious that the most common way of travelling for pupils was walking to and from the school in the
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year
1990. A majority
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(around
12
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million)
of
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trips
were done
using this mode of transport whereas
in contrast
nowadays this
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number
halved and
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only
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around
6
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million
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trips
were made
. On a similar scale the remaining modes of transport suffered a
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likewise decrease
in
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IELTS academic The given chart provides information about the number of trips made by children in a particular country in the years 1990 and 2010 to travel to and from school using various way of transportation and gives the total number of trips per year.

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