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The bar chart shows the distribution of employment among agriculture, services, industries in three countries in 1980 and projected distribution in 2020.

The bar chart shows the distribution of employment among agriculture, services, industries in three countries in 1980 and projected distribution in 2020. j9xWp
The bar charts compare and contrast the employment distribution in three different fields: agriculture, services and industries in three countries in 1980 and forecasted distribution in 2020. It is obvious that the highest distribution of country A and C is in services while in country B is agriculture. According to the charts, in 1980, the employment distribution for agriculture in country B was over 50%. This figure was much larger than the proportion in country A and country C which just roughly 20% and nearly 2%, respectively. Besides, 30% of the total distribution in country A was belonged to industries while this figure in country B was 10% less than country A. The employment invest for industries purposes in country C was nearly 40%. Moreover, the main distribution of country A and country C was for services with nearly 50% and over 60%, respectively while this number in country B just accounted for 20%. Specifically, in 2020, the distribution for agriculture is predicted to decrease in three countries. The investment for industries is forecasted to decrease in country A and C while this figure is likely to increase in country B. The major distribution for services is estimated about 80% of the total in country C while this number in country A is likely about 50% and in country B is just around 40%.
The bar charts compare and contrast the employment
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It is obvious that the highest
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A and C is in
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B is agriculture.

According to the charts, in 1980, the employment
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for agriculture in
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B was over 50%. This figure was much larger than the proportion in
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A. The employment invest for
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IELTS academic The bar chart shows the distribution of employment among agriculture, services, industries in three countries in 1980 and projected distribution in 2020.

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