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The bar chart shows the average pass rates in undergraduates year 1.

The bar chart shows the average pass rates in undergraduates year 1. 86n9l
The bar chart illustrates how well students from a range of disciplines that in the first assessment in the period of 2010 and 2015. In general, it experienced an upward trend in every year. Taking the education and train, it stood at 20% in 2010. Nevertheless, the number of undergraduates in education and train increased significantly in 2015. Turning to the engineering, it had the percentage at 60% in 2010. In 2015, it reached a peak at 70%. In addition, law in 2010 was a little bit higher than in 2015. Regarding the MBA, it shows the lowest result in 2010 and 2015, reaching approximately 5% in 2010 and just over 10% in 2015. Concerning architecture and construction, the figure of college students in year 1 in 2010 stood at 30% and depicted significant increase to 55% in 2015. Moving to the travel and hospitality, it represented the result of data at 21% in 2010. In conclusion, engineering shows the highest result in data in 2015. Due to the fact that, many students in year 1 have a greater performance in engineering than other subjects in 2010 and 2015.
The bar chart illustrates how well students from a range of disciplines that in the
first
assessment in the period of 2010 and 2015.
In general
, it experienced an upward trend in every year.

Taking the education and train, it stood at 20% in 2010.
Nevertheless
, the number of undergraduates in education and train increased
significantly
in 2015. Turning to the engineering, it had the percentage at 60% in 2010. In 2015, it reached a peak at 70%.
In addition
, law in 2010 was a
little bit
higher than in 2015.

Regarding the MBA, it
shows
the lowest result in 2010 and 2015, reaching approximately 5% in 2010 and
just
over 10% in 2015. Concerning architecture and construction, the figure of college students in year 1 in 2010 stood at 30% and depicted significant increase to 55% in 2015. Moving to the travel and hospitality, it represented the result of data at 21% in 2010.

In conclusion
, engineering
shows
the highest result in data in 2015. Due to the fact that,
many
students in year 1 have a greater performance in engineering than other subjects in 2010 and 2015.
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