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The bar chart shows the percentage of adults who had obese between 1965 to 2015, while the pie chart reveals the proportion with variety of weight. In the bar chart we see a raise in 1995 that continues to 2015 and the pie chart shows that the over third of adults has overweight in 2015. Base on the bar chart, between 1965 to 1985, the rate of overweight was stable and was just under 50 percentages. As we see, increase of weight began in 1995 and each decade add 10 % on it. So in 2015 the percentage of people who has overweight is about 80% and that is the highest amount in this period. The pie chart shows the rate of several group of people that have overweight and reports a comparison between them in 2015. Healthy or underweight group is just under a third, 29%. The most percentage is related to obese people.
The bar
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the
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of adults who had obese
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between 1965 to 2015
, while the pie
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reveals the proportion with variety of weight. In the bar
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chart
we
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see
a raise in 1995 that continues to 2015 and the pie
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shows
that the over third of adults has
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overweight
in 2015.

Base on the bar
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chart
,
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between 1965 to 1985
, the rate of
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overweight
was stable and was
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just
under 50
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percentages
. As we
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see
, increase of weight began in 1995 and each decade
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add
10 % on it.
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So
in 2015 the
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percentage
of
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people
who has
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overweight
is about 80% and
that is
the highest amount in this period. The pie
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chart
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shows
the rate of several group of
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people
that have
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overweight
and reports a comparison between them in 2015. Healthy or underweight group is
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just
under a third, 29%. The most
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is related
to obese
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people
.
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IELTS academic compare between bar chart and pie chart

Academic
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2 paragraphs
155 words
6.0
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