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The given table illustrates the information about the date open, length of the route, and passengers per year that the subway systems initiated in six municipalities

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The given table illustrates the information about the date open, length of the route, and passengers per year that the subway systems initiated in six municipalities Overall, the oldest railway structure had more passengers and a larger path than the new railway systems As can be seen from the table, London was the oldest structure that was opened in 1863. It also has the largest route in total, with 394km, and approaches the number of passengers each year about 775 million people. The second-largest route was Paris, which was almost half the size of the London underground. With 1927 million passengers a year, the Tokyo system was undoubtedly the most used, while being just the third largest in terms of size. The Washington DC underground was the longest of the three modern networks, with 126 kilometers of rail, compared to only 11 and 28 kilometers for the Kyoto and Los Angeles systems, respectively. The Los Angeles network, which began in 2001, was the most recent, while the Kyoto network was the oldest.
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per year that the subway systems initiated in six municipalities

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and a larger path than the new railway systems

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from the table, London was the oldest structure that
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each year about 775 million
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. The second-largest route was Paris, which was almost half the size of the London underground. With 1927 million
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a year, the Tokyo system was
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the third largest in terms of size.

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11 and 28 kilometers for the Kyoto and Los Angeles systems,
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. The Los Angeles network, which began in 2001, was the most recent, while the Kyoto network was the oldest.
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IELTS academic The given table illustrates the information about the date open, length of the route, and passengers per year that the subway systems initiated in six municipalities

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