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The bar chart shows how the number of local and international visitors to a museum per year changed from 2001 to 2011.

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The bar chart shows how the number of local and international visitors to a museum per year changed from 2001 to 2011. Overall it is clear that the number of international visitors was greater than that of local ones between 2005 and 2011. There was a sharp fall in the number of local guests from 100. 000 to around 22. 000 between 2001 and 2004. At the same time, the number of international visitors increased slightly from about 10. 000 people to about 18. 000. The number of local visitors increased moderately from around 22. 000 people to nearly 60. 000 while the data of international visitors rose significantly from around 20. 000 visitors to over 80. 000 visitors between 2004 to 2008. There was a minimal decrease in the number of local visitors from 2008 to 2011. Meanwhile, the figure for international visitors fell considerably from around 80. 000 people to nearly 60. 000 people.
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ones between 2005 and 2011.

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