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The line graph shows how the amount of fast food consumed in the UK changed from 1970 to 1990.

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The line graph shows how the amount of fast food consumed in the UK changed from 1970 to 1990. Overall, the consumption of hamburgers and fish and chips increased over the period while that of pizza witnessed/experienced a downward trend. The figure for fish and chips witnessed a moderate rise from around 100 grams/week to around 150 grams/week between 1970 and 1980; meanwhile, the consumption of hamburgers increased from about 50 grams/week to more than 100 grams/week between 1970 and 1985. Then there was a significant rise in the data of fish and chips consumption from 150 grams to 500 grams from 1980 to1990. The amount of hamburger consumed saw a considerable rise and peaked at 300 grams in 1990. Besides, the data of pizza consumption which started at 300 grams decreased moderately from 300 grams to 200 grams between 1970 and 1980.
The line graph
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how the amount of
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fast
food consumed in the UK
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changed
from 1970 to 1990.

Overall
, the
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consumption
of hamburgers and fish and chips increased over the period while that of pizza witnessed/experienced a downward trend.

The figure for fish and chips witnessed a moderate rise from around 100
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grams/week
to around 150
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grams/week
between 1970 and 1980; meanwhile, the
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consumption
of hamburgers increased from about 50
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grams/week
to more than 100
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grams/week
between 1970 and 1985. Then there was a significant rise in the data of fish and chips
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consumption
from 150
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grams
to 500
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grams
from 1980 to1990. The amount of hamburger consumed
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saw
a considerable rise and peaked at 300
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grams
in 1990.

Besides
, the data of pizza
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consumption
which
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started
at 300
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grams
decreased
moderately
from 300
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grams
to 200
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grams
between 1970 and 1980.
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IELTS academic The line graph shows how the amount of fast food consumed in the UK changed from 1970 to 1990.

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