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science and technology, especially the internet, have been more developed and used more and more widely

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In recent years, science and technology, especially the internet, have been more developed and used more and more widely because of many reasons. First, just having a device with an internet connection, people can access social networking sites such as Zalo, Facebook, Youtube… easily and quickly. Thanks to internet, social network users can update news rapidly and share and connect to friends around the world. In addition, during the current pandemic, most activities have been moved to operate online because of social distancing. For example, everyone stays at home and goes to the market online so as to meet their daily needs and people can play games online in order to entertain. With such changes to the way activities are organized, safety in the community is secured. Clearly, the Internet is extremely important to people to adapt to current life.
In recent years, science and technology,
especially
the internet, have been more developed and
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used
more and more
widely
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because
of
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many
reasons.

First
,
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just
having a device with an internet connection,
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people
can access social networking sites such as
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Zalo
, Facebook,
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Youtube
…
easily
and
quickly
. Thanks to internet, social network users can update news
rapidly
and share and connect to friends around the world.

In addition
, during the
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current
pandemic, most activities have been
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moved
to operate online
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because
of social distancing.
For example
, everyone stays at home and goes to the market online
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so as to
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meet
their daily needs and
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people
can play games online in order to entertain. With such
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changes
to the way activities
are organized
, safety in the community
is secured
.

Clearly
, the Internet is
extremely
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important
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
to adapt to
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current
life.

IELTS academic science and technology, especially the internet, have been more developed and used more and more widely

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  American English
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140 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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