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The bar chart provides informations about the number of girls per 100 boys enrolled in different levels of school education Overall, the number of girls experienced an upward trend in all the different levels and years, but all levels had some fluctuations, although developed countries in 1998 are always higher than developing one, while developing countries in both years were approximately the same in primary and secondary Firstly, number of girls was in developing countries being less than the ones in developed countries, then both rose from 83 to 95 and from 87 to 96 which is approximately equal.

The bar chart provides informations about the number of girls per 100 boys enrolled in different levels of school education Overall, the number of girls experienced an upward trend in all the different levels and years, but all levels had some fluctuations, although developed countries in 1998 are always higher than developing one, while developing countries in both years were approximately the same in primary and secondary Firstly, number of girls was in developing countries being less than the ones in developed countries, then both rose from 83 to 95 and from 87 to 96 which is approximately equal. qaED5
The bar chart provides informations about the number of girls per 100 boys enrolled in different levels of school education Overall, the number of girls experienced an upward trend in all the different levels and years, but all levels had some fluctuations, although developed countries in 1998 are always higher than developing one, while developing countries in both years were approximately the same in primary and secondary Firstly, number of girls was in developing countries being less than the ones in developed countries, then both rose from 83 to 95 and from 87 to 96 which is approximately equal. In 1990, secondary education was less than primary in both years 1990 and 1998, but in the developed countries it was almost equal and reached the target in 1998 Finally, developing countries showed a graduate decrease in tetiary education from almost 100 to almost 75, while it steadly growth in the developed countries and reached the target in both years
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