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The bar chart provides information about the different ages percents In 2010 in Australia.

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The bar chart illustrates the six different ages(15 to 24, 25 to 34, 35 to 44, 45 to 54, 55 to 64) doing the physical activities in the Australia during the 2010. Unitsvare measured in percentage. Firstly, in 2010th year the percentage of ages which is 15 to 24 about 100, 5 percent. The percentage of male is peaked; however, the female measure is reduced. After that the cursor of (25 to 34) Is approximately 42 and the female percent is 48, 6. Moreover, the ages of 25 to 34 percent is decreased step by step. The measure of 35 to 44 male is 39, 5 and female is by 52, 5. Secondly, it is widely that physical activity percent of 2010th period. The indicator of 45 to 54 is the female percent approximately 53, 3 and it's measure overtaking than the male percent. However, 65 and over ages group, female and male measures are equally percent. To summarize, the most marked change is the bar chart is that the female is peaked of 53, 3.
The bar chart illustrates the six
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, in 2010th year the percentage of
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which is 15 to 24 about 100, 5
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. The percentage of male
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;
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, the
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female
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. After that the cursor of (25 to 34) Is approximately 42 and the
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female
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percent
is 48, 6.
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, the
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ages
of 25 to 34
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percent
is decreased
step by step. The
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measure
of 35 to 44 male is 39, 5 and
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female
is by 52, 5.
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percent
of 2010th period. The indicator of 45 to 54 is the
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female
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approximately 53, 3 and it's
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overtaking than the male
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percent
.
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, 65 and over
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group,
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and male
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, the most marked
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is the bar chart is that the
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female
is peaked
of 53, 3.
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