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The bar chart indicates the number of citizens in continents around the world who accessed the Internet in 2011.

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The bar chart indicates the number of citizens in continents around the world who accessed the Internet in 2011. Generally speaking, the Asian and the European have by far the highest number of people using the Internet, while it was the lowest in the Middle East and Oceania. In 2011, approximately 910 millions Asian people accessed the Internet. Meanwhile, that figure for European was relatively smaller at roughly 476 millions. It is clear to see that the Asian users were twice as many as Europeans. Moreover, the Australian were the least interested in the net and only reached a total of 21. 3 million users. The North American had a moderate number of Net consumers that was about 272 million people and the Latin American had a slight decrease that is about 215 millions in total. The final three continents' number of Internet users were rather low, with 110 millions, 68 millions and 21 millions respectively To sum up, the Asian were the biggest customer among the continents compared in the chart while the lowest level were attributed to the residents of Australian
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of citizens in continents around the world who accessed the Internet in 2011.
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using the Internet, while it was the lowest in the Middle East and Oceania.

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Asian
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accessed the Internet. Meanwhile, that figure for European was
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that the Asian users were twice as
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as Europeans.
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reached a total of 21. 3
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users. The North American had a moderate
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of Net consumers that was about 272
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and the Latin American had a slight decrease
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in total. The final three continents'
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of Internet users were
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, 68
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To sum up, the Asian were the biggest customer among the continents compared in the chart while the lowest level
were attributed
to the residents of Australian
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