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The bar chart illustrates the proportion of tourists using 3 major airports in New York City from 1995 to 2000

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The bar chart illustrates the proportion of tourists using 3 major airports in New York City from 1995 to 2000 Overall, there was a fluctuant trend in the number of passengers who travelled to John F. Kennedy airport over the period given. Meanwhile, the data on 2 other airports were an upward trend, and LaGuardia often was the most popular airport in the researched period. In 1995, the proportion of tourists who visited LaGuardia airport took the lead with over 35 million and 2 times as high as Newark. In addition, the number of travellers at John F. Kennedy airport was over 25 million and took second place. Later time, in 1997, the data on tourists who travelled to John F. Kennedy increased remarkably to reach the highest point of 48 million. Besides, the number of visitors at Newark airport rose significantly to approximately 40 million, similar to the figure for LaGuardia airport with over 42 million respectively In 2000, There was a slight drop to over 42 million of the number of tourists who visited John F. Kennedy. In contrast, the data on visitors at LaGuardia airport rose dramatically to nearly 70 million and the figure for Newark airport stayed unchanged at 42 million travellers.
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using 3 major
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in New York City from 1995 to 2000

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, there was a
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fluctuant
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number
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who
travelled to John F. Kennedy
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airport
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over
the period
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. Meanwhile, the data on 2 other
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airports
were an upward trend, and LaGuardia
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was the most popular
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airport
in the researched period.

In 1995, the proportion of
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tourists
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who
visited LaGuardia
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airport
took the lead with
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over
35
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million
and 2 times as high as Newark.
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, the
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travellers
at John F. Kennedy
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airport
was
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over
25
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million
and took second place. Later time, in 1997, the data on
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tourists
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who
travelled to John F. Kennedy increased
remarkably
to reach the highest point of 48
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million
.
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, the
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number
of visitors at Newark
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airport
rose
significantly
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million
, similar to the figure for LaGuardia
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airport
with
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42
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million
respectively


In 2000, There was a slight drop to
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million
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tourists
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visited John F. Kennedy.
In contrast
, the data on visitors at LaGuardia
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rose
dramatically
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and the figure for Newark
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stayed unchanged at 42
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travellers
.
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IELTS academic The bar chart illustrates the proportion of tourists using 3 major airports in New York City from 1995 to 2000

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