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The bar chart illustrates the proportion of Australian males and females in various age groups doing regularly physical activity in 2010.

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The bar chart illustrates the proportion of Australian males and females in various age groups doing regularly physical activity in 2010. Overall, there was fluctuation throughout the ages, while in most of the ages the percentage of women doing sports outraced the men. In terms of men, who were between 15 and 24 did a lot physical activity compared to other same sexs. While it was 52. 8%, from 25 to 44, these figures showed downward trend and they were 42. 2% and 39. 5% respectively. From 45 to 65 and over rate of figures increased moderately and accounted for 43. 1%, 45. 1 and 46. 7% respectively, however none of them outraced men in "15 to 24" which exceeded the proportion of women at the same age. With regard to the women, it started with 47. 7% in "15 to 24". Nevertheless, from "25 to 34" to "45 to 54", these figures rose noticeably and made up 48. 9%, 52. 5% and 53. 3% which overrun the percent of males. Likewise, women in "55 to 64" passed the males by around 7%. Furthermore, the female in " 65 and over" hit low-point and was 47. 1%.
The bar chart illustrates the proportion of Australian males and females in various
age
groups doing
regularly
physical activity in 2010.
Overall
, there was fluctuation throughout the
ages
, while in most of the
ages
the percentage of
women
doing sports outraced the
men
. In terms of
men
, who were between 15 and 24 did a
lot
physical activity compared to other same
sexs
. While it was 52. 8%, from 25 to 44, these figures
showed
downward
trend and
they were 42. 2% and 39. 5%
respectively
. From 45 to 65 and over rate of figures increased
moderately
and accounted for 43. 1%, 45. 1 and 46. 7%
respectively
,
however
none of them outraced
men
in
"
15 to 24
"
which exceeded the proportion of
women
at the same
age
. With regard to the
women
, it
started
with 47. 7% in
"
15 to 24
"
.
Nevertheless
, from
"
25 to 34
"
to
"
45 to 54
"
, these figures rose
noticeably
and made up 48. 9%, 52. 5% and 53. 3% which overrun the percent of males.
Likewise
,
women
in
"
55 to 64
"
passed the males by around 7%.
Furthermore
, the female in
"
65 and over
"
hit low-point and was 47. 1%.
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IELTS academic The bar chart illustrates the proportion of Australian males and females in various age groups doing regularly physical activity in 2010.

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