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The bar chart illustrates the percentage of Australia women giving birth to their first child in three different years 1966, 1986 and 2006.

The bar chart illustrates the percentage of Australia women giving birth to their first child in three different years 1966, 1986 and 2006. j99m1
In the last two years of the period, 1986 and 2006, young mother who under 24-year-olds witnessed a significant decline to 10% in under-19 age group and 39% in 20-24-year-old mothers. the opposite pattern was seen on the remaining age groups. People in the 25-29 age group increased from 38% to over 50%, and then decrease by around 10%, whereas the figure for 30-34-year-old mothers rose to 50% in 2006. The percentage of in the age group of 35-39 and over-40 experience a grow up to 29% and 5% respectively.
In the last two years of the period, 1986 and 2006, young mother who under 24-year-olds witnessed a significant decline to 10% in under-19
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IELTS academic The bar chart illustrates the percentage of Australia women giving birth to their first child in three different years 1966, 1986 and 2006.

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