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The bar chart illustrates the number of sales of various types of digital games world-wide during the period of 2000 to 2006.

The bar chart illustrates the number of sales of various types of digital games world-wide during the period of 2000 to 2006. Overall, handheld games reign the highest in all of the given period. Conversely, online games, mobile games and console games remained in the similar range with a considerable fluacuation. First, during the year 2000, there were only handheld games and console games. The following next two years met the brith of online games and mobile games respectively, both have less than half of the sales than that of the console. The rising trend of handheld games was steady, starting from 12 in 2000 and ended at 18 during 2006, with exponetial increases during 2002 and 2006, whereas others were dynamic. Console games met a continously slow decline until it was surpassed by both mobile and online game during 2005.
The bar chart illustrates the number of sales of various types of digital
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world-wide during the period of 2000 to 2006.

Overall
, handheld
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games
reign the highest in
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, online
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games
, mobile
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games
and console
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games
remained in the similar range with a considerable
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fluacuation
.

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, during the year 2000, there were
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handheld
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games
and console
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. The following
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two years met the
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brith
of online
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games
and mobile
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respectively
, both have less than half of the sales than that of the console.

The rising trend of handheld
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games
was steady, starting from 12 in 2000 and ended at 18 during 2006, with
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exponetial
increases during 2002 and 2006, whereas others were dynamic. Console
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met a
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continously
slow decline until it
was surpassed
by both mobile and online game during 2005.
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IELTS academic The bar chart illustrates the number of sales of various types of digital games world-wide during the period of 2000 to 2006.

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