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The bar chart illustrates the lowest and highest levels of sulfur dioxide and nitrous oxide in the air in four big cities (Los Angeles, Calcutta, Beijing, and Mexico City) in the year 2000.

The bar chart illustrates the lowest and highest levels of sulfur dioxide and nitrous oxide in the air in four big cities (Los Angeles, Calcutta, Beijing, and Mexico City) in the year 2000. yP1yd
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The bar chart illustrates the lowest and highest levels of sulfur dioxide and nitrous oxide in the
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(Los Angeles, Calcutta, Beijing, and Mexico City) in the year 2000. Units
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contained maximum pollutants, whereas Los Angeles'
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quality was less polluted among all four cities.

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N20 was around the same in

Calcutta and Beijing, 52 micrograms per

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nitrous oxide (N20) was almost four times

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it was not micrograms per m3. For Los Angeles,

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was mealy

half of Mexico City. In terms of the minimum

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minimum N20 was 113, which was the greatest in all

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