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The bar chart illustrates the global sales of dissimilar types of digital games from 2000 to 2006.

The bar chart illustrates the global sales of dissimilar types of digital games from 2000 to 2006. y7w3r
The bar chart illustrates the global sales of dissimilar types of digital games from 2000 to 2006. Overall, there are 4 numerical games. Trade is shown which is traded in billions. To begin with, in 2020 the technology had only just begun to expand, so mobile phones and online games were not come out yet. In the initial year, 11 billion ongoing games were traded. In the corresponding year, console games were marketed near to 6 billion, but it was diminished from this < unclear > year to 2006. Online games were purchased and sold in 2001, though it started with 1 billion and progressed to 2006 and reached 8 billion in 2006. Mobile games, which began to be sold, were developed until 2006. But in 2004 online games and mobile phone games were the same and there were fluctuations between the years 2005 and 2006. In 2005, mobile games outnumbered online games, but in 2006 online games surpassed mobile games with a high increase. As a result, hand games were at the top from 2000 to 2006.
The bar chart illustrates the global sales of dissimilar types of digital
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games
from 2000

to 2006.
Overall
, there are 4 numerical
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games
. Trade
is shown
which
is traded
in

billions. To
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begin
with, in 2020 the technology had
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only
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just
begun to expand,
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so
mobile

phones and
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online
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games
were not
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come
out
yet
.

In the initial year, 11
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billion
ongoing
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games
were traded
. In the corresponding year,

console
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games
were marketed
near to 6
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billion
,
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but
it
was diminished
from this <

unclear > year to 2006.
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Online
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were
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purchased
and sold in 2001, though it

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started
with 1
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billion
and progressed to 2006 and reached 8
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billion
in 2006. Mobile

games, which began to
be sold
,
were developed
until 2006.
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But
in 2004
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online
games

and mobile phone
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games
were the same and there were fluctuations between the years

2005 and 2006. In 2005, mobile
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games
outnumbered
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online
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games
,
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but
in 2006 online

games surpassed mobile
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games
with a high increase.
As a result
, hand
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games
were at

the top from 2000 to 2006.
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IELTS academic The bar chart illustrates the global sales of dissimilar types of digital games from 2000 to 2006.

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