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The bar chart illustrates the findings of a questionnaire about how often Australian citizens in five cities buy and drink coffee and tea.

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The bar chart illustrates the findings of a questionnaire about how often Australian citizens in five cities buy and drink coffee and tea. Overall, the percentages of citizens went to café in the last 4 weeks were highest in most of the surveyed cities except for Adelaide, whereas the figures for fresh coffee buyers were lowest in all 5 mentioned cities. It can be seen that in the last 4 weeks, the proportions of people went to coffee shop in Sydney, Melbourne and Hobart were the most significant, with 61% for Sydney and roughly 63% for Melbourne and Hobart. Turning to instant coffee buying habit, the survey witnessed the top figure in Hobart city with 53%, much higher than the percentages of instant coffee consumers in Sydney and Melbourne (46% and 48% respectively). By contrast, an upward trend was recorded in the proportion of citizens who bought fresh coffee in Sydney with 44% in the last 4 weeks, whereas in Melbourne and Hobart, fresh coffee was a much less famous choice for the people (42% for the former and only 37% for the later). In addition, while a majority of people in Brisbane prefer to go a café (52% according to the result), instant coffee was an ideal coffee option for citizens of Adelaide. Besides, a notable feature is that the rates of fresh coffee buyers in both Brisbane and Adelaide were nearly the same at 34%.
The bar chart illustrates the findings of a questionnaire about how
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Australian
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citizens
in five cities
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coffee
and tea.

Overall
, the percentages of
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citizens
went to café in the last 4 weeks were highest in most of the surveyed cities
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except for
Adelaide, whereas the figures for
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fresh
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coffee
buyers were lowest in all 5 mentioned cities.

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seen
that in the last 4 weeks, the proportions of
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people
went to
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coffee
shop in Sydney, Melbourne and Hobart were the most significant, with 61% for Sydney and roughly 63% for Melbourne and Hobart. Turning to instant
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coffee
buying habit, the survey witnessed the top figure in Hobart city with 53%, much higher than the percentages of instant
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coffee
consumers in Sydney and Melbourne (46% and 48%
respectively
). By contrast, an upward trend
was recorded
in the proportion of
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citizens
who
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bought
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fresh
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coffee
in Sydney with 44% in the last 4 weeks, whereas in Melbourne and Hobart,
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fresh
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coffee
was a much less
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famous
choice for the
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people
(42% for the former and
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only
37% for the later).

In addition
, while a majority of
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people
in Brisbane prefer to go a café (52% according to the result), instant
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coffee
was an ideal
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coffee
option for
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citizens
of Adelaide.
Besides
, a notable feature is that the rates of
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fresh
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coffee
buyers in both Brisbane and Adelaide were
nearly
the same at 34%.
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IELTS academic The bar chart illustrates the findings of a questionnaire about how often Australian citizens in five cities buy and drink coffee and tea.

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