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The bar chart illustrates the figure for expenditures of food, housing, transports, health care and clothing in 4 different countries in the year 2009.

The bar chart illustrates the figure for expenditures of food, housing, transports, health care and clothing in 4 different countries in the year 2009. G9wNj
The bar chart illustrates the figure for expenditures of food, housing, transports, health care and clothing in 4 different countries in the year 2009. As it is observed, the figure for housing expenditures in the US, the UK, Canada and Japan was occupied the most. The opposite was true for the figure for health care in 2009. It is also noting that the US came out on top regarding housing expenditures. In examined year, the percentage of housing consuming of the US was highest point at 25% in compared with food and transports spendingmat 14 and 17% respectively. The proportion for spending on health care and clothing was less than 12%. Also, &Canada spending on housing, transports and food occupied the most at 22%, 17% and 14% respectively. It also can be seen that the UK consuming for health care and clothing occupied a minoroty under 10%. Contary to food and transports expenditures was more than at 20%. By constrast, Japan spent the most on food at 24%, was which followed by houisng at 21%. At the same time transports expenditures stood at 10% anf health care and clothing consuming was less than about 5%.
The bar chart illustrates the figure for
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expenditures
of
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food
, housing,
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transports
,
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health
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care
and clothing in 4
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different
countries in the year 2009.

As it
is observed
, the figure for housing
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expenditures
in the US, the UK, Canada and Japan
was occupied
the most. The opposite was true for the figure for
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health
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care
in 2009. It is
also
noting that the US came out on top regarding housing expenditures.

In examined year, the percentage of housing consuming of the US was
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highest
point at 25% in compared with
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food
and
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transports
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spendingmat
14 and 17%
respectively
.

The proportion for spending on
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health
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care
and clothing was less than 12%.
Also
,
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&Canada
spending on housing,
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transports
and
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food
occupied the most at 22%, 17% and 14%
respectively
. It
also
can be
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seen
that the UK consuming for
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health
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care
and clothing occupied a
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minoroty
under 10%.
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Contary
to
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food
and
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transports
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expenditures
was more than at 20%.

By
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constrast
, Japan spent the most on
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food
at 24%, was which followed by
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houisng
at 21%. At the same time
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transports
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expenditures
stood at 10%
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anf
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health
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care
and clothing consuming was less than about 5%.
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IELTS academic The bar chart illustrates the figure for expenditures of food, housing, transports, health care and clothing in 4 different countries in the year 2009.

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