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The bar chart illustrates the amount of money spent on different categories in five countries during the year 2009.

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The bar chart illustrates the amount of money spent on different categories in five countries during the year 2009. Overall, it is clear that housing and transportation were by far the most common expenditure in the five countries. In terms of housing, the figure for the US was 26%, which was 2% higher than that of the UK and the percentage of Canada and Japan’s spending on this category were almost the same, at 22% and 24% respectively. In contrast, around 28% of the Japan’s used on food, followed by the UK with 20%, Canada with 15% and the US with 14%. The amount of money spent on transportation in Canada was exactly 20%, doubling the figure for Japan (10%) and a little higher compared to the US (18%) and the UK (15%). However, there were no significant differences in the proportions of the outgoings in health care and clothing with the approximate figures of 3-5% and 4-7% respectively.
The bar chart illustrates the amount of money spent on
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categories in five countries during the year 2009.

Overall
, it is
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clear
that housing and transportation were by far the most common expenditure in the five countries.

In terms of housing, the figure for the US was 26%, which was 2% higher than that of the UK and the percentage of Canada and Japan’s spending on this category were almost the same, at 22% and 24%
respectively
.
In contrast
, around 28% of the Japan’s
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used
on food, followed by the UK with 20%, Canada with 15% and the US with 14%.

The amount of money spent on transportation in Canada was exactly 20%, doubling the figure for Japan (10%) and a
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little
higher compared to the US (18%) and the UK (15%).
However
, there were no significant differences in the proportions of the outgoings in health care and clothing with the approximate figures of 3-5% and 4-7%
respectively
.
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