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The bar chart illustrates how the young opt for their favorite transport percentage wise in the four distinct countries.

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The bar chart illustrates how the young opt for their favorite transport percentage wise in the four distinct countries. Overall, it is obvious that whilst the car is the leading vehicle in three countries, including the USA, Great Britain and France, the bicycle is the most preferred mean of transport in Germany. Also evident is that the motorcycle is the least popular vehicle in all the countries, except for the USA. In terms of the car preferences, France youngsters’ selection of this transport accounts for the zenith of roughly 75%, or approximately as twofold as the figure for Germany (40%). Additionally, both Great Britain and the USA share the same rate of car selection, at 60%. As regards the motorcycle, that of the USA occupies the highest of 30%, compared to the rest proportions of other surveyed countries, which oscillate between 10% and 15%. In respect of the bicycle, nearly 45% is the rate of Germany, which is also the highest of all the figures, as opposed to 30% of Great Britain, or as threefold as the figure for the USA and as double as that of France.
The bar chart illustrates how the young opt for their favorite transport percentage wise in the four distinct countries.

Overall
, it is obvious that whilst the car is the leading vehicle in three countries, including the USA, Great Britain and France, the bicycle is the most preferred mean of transport in Germany.
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Also
evident is that the motorcycle is the least popular vehicle in all the countries,
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except for
the USA.

In terms of the car preferences, France youngsters’ selection of this transport accounts for the zenith of roughly 75%, or approximately as twofold as the figure for Germany (40%).
Additionally
, both Great Britain and the USA share the same rate of car selection, at 60%.

As regards the motorcycle, that of the USA occupies the highest of 30%, compared to the rest proportions of other surveyed countries, which oscillate between 10% and 15%.

In respect of the bicycle,
nearly
45% is the rate of Germany, which is
also
the highest of all the figures, as opposed to 30% of Great Britain, or as threefold as the figure for the USA and as double as that of France.
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