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The bar chart illustrates how many two different genders including male and female chasing some majors in university in 2005.

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The bar chart illustrates how many two different genders including male and female chasing some majors in university in 2005. Overall, while the male spent invested more in sciences, mathematics, ulternative and law, female prefered spending time on social sciences and langauges. It is also clear that similarities can be seen in the figure for both humanities. Meanwhile, approximately 25 thousands was spent on social sciences in the female, compared to 14 thousands in the male. In terms of languages, female’s option was higher than that of the male with 18 thousands and just under around to 3 thousands respectively. Futhermore, the arts’s male chasing more than female’s with round about 10 thousands for the first one and 3 thousands for the second one The quantity of male’s students in sciences was at 21 thousands sterling, and the figure for female was slightly lower at 10 thousands. Similarly the investment in mathematics, literature and law in the male exceeded that of female with about 18, 15 and 10 thousands for the former and 4, 12 and 5 thousands for the laters
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in the figure for both humanities.

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, compared to 14 thousands in the male. In terms of languages,
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with round about 10 thousands for the
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IELTS academic The bar chart illustrates how many two different genders including male and female chasing some majors in university in 2005.

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