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Summer and Winter Olympics

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The given first bar chart shows data about the amount of medals which five countries have won in the summer Olympics, while the second bar chart demonstrate which nations have won the most medal in the summer Olympics. Overall, Norway has gained the most medals in the winter Olympics and winning approximately an equal gold, silver and bronze medals. USA has won the most medals in the summer Olympics. Norway has gained the number of medals is about 370 medals, however Canada has won approximately 200 medals in fifth countries. At the same time, in the summer Olympics, USA has won just over 2500 medals. Russia is the second highest, winning about 1800 medals, whereas France is the last among five countries with about 700 medals. In conclusion, the two bar chart illustrate how many medals won in the summer and the winter Olympics, which USA, Germany and Russia have won medals in both Olympics.
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data about the amount of
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which five countries have won in the
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Olympics, while the second bar chart demonstrate which nations have won the most
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in the
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Olympics.

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, Norway has gained the most
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in the winter Olympics and winning approximately an equal gold, silver and bronze
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medals
. USA has won the most
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in the
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Olympics.

Norway has gained the number of
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is about 370
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,
however
Canada has won approximately 200
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in fifth countries. At the same time, in the
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summer
Olympics, USA has won
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over 2500
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medals
. Russia is the second highest, winning about 1800
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, whereas France is the last among five countries with about 700 medals.

In conclusion
, the two bar chart illustrate how
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won in the
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and the winter Olympics, which USA, Germany and Russia have won
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in both Olympics.
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IELTS academic Summer and Winter Olympics

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
155 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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