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The bar chart gives information about the percentage of workers in different sectors of employment in three countries at different stages of economic development. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown.

The bar chart shows informations about the proportion of employees in agricultural, industrial and service sectors in three different countries. In Japan, service sector is the highest proportion, it is around 60%. It is followed by industrial sector which is approximately 30%. Less than 10% of employees in agricultural sectors. Brazil has a same number of workforce in agricultural and industrial sectors and it is roughly 25%. Most of the employees works in service sectors and it is nearly 50%. In contrast, India has the most working population in agricultural sector which is about 60%. Fewer people works in industrial and service sector, about 10% and 30% respectively. Overall, Japan and Brazil have the largest percentage of workforce in service sector and lowest percentage of workforce in agricultural sector whereas India has the fewest percentage of workforce in service sector and highest percentage of workforce in agricultural sector.
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In Japan,
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which is approximately 30%. Less than 10% of employees in
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Brazil has a same number of
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which is about 60%. Fewer
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IELTS academic The bar chart gives information about the percentage of workers in different sectors of employment in three countries at different stages of economic development. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown.

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