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The graph below shows the contribution of three sectors - agriculture, manufacturing and business and financial services - to the UK economy in the twentieth century. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and the comparisons where relevant.

The bar graph compares the input from three sectors into British economy over 100 year period from 1900 to 2000. Overall, it is evident that the contributions made by agriculture and manufacturing sides were tremendous in the earlier half of the century; however, as the years progressed business and finance became the predominant pillar of the British economy. In the year 1900, the most significant contribution of approximately 50% was made my agriculture department, this was succeeded by manufacturing sector which had an input of around 45%. While, business and finance had a share of mere 3%. After fifty years, the support to economy from agriculture segment grew to around 53%, whereas, that from manufacturing department fell to about 37%. However, share by the business and finance mounted about two folds to 8%. In the later part of the century, that is in the year 1975, the input from agriculture side dropped dramatically to 10%. Same was the case with manufacturing which saw a decline of 4%, albeit not as significant as agriculture sector. Nevertheless, business and finance was the only segment where improvement was noticed. At the end of the 20th century, agriculture sector had an input of only about 3%, while, that from manufacturing it was approximately 15%. The only area that continued to grow was business and finance which finally had a contribution of about 35%.
The bar graph compares the
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input
from three
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sectors
into British economy over 100
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period from 1900 to 2000.

Overall
, it is evident that the contributions made by
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agriculture
and
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manufacturing
sides were tremendous in the earlier half of the century;
however
, as the years progressed
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business
and
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finance
became the predominant pillar of the British economy.

In the
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year
1900, the most significant contribution of approximately 50%
was made
my
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agriculture
department, this
was succeeded
by
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manufacturing
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sector
which had an
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input
of around 45%. While,
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business
and
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finance
had a share of mere 3%. After fifty years, the support to economy from
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agriculture
segment grew to around 53%, whereas, that from
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manufacturing
department fell to about 37%.
However
, share by the
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business
and
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finance
mounted about two folds to 8%.

In the later part of the century,
that is
in the
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year
1975, the
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input
from
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agriculture
side dropped
dramatically
to 10%. Same was the case with
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manufacturing
which
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a decline of 4%, albeit not as significant as
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agriculture
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sector
.
Nevertheless
,
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business
and
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finance
was the
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only
segment where improvement
was noticed
. At the
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end
of the 20th century,
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agriculture
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sector
had an
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input
of
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only
about 3%, while, that from
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manufacturing
it was approximately 15%. The
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only
area that continued to grow was
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business
and
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finance
which
finally
had a contribution of about 35%.
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IELTS academic The graph below shows the contribution of three sectors - agriculture, manufacturing and business and financial services - to the UK economy in the twentieth century.

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