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the bar chart enumerates the rare of works in turism related in industries in one Unate Kingdom town during 2 decade Over the whole time deriod, the significance of restaurants claime steadily while sport&leisure almost unchanged and travel &tourism gradual declined in importance decade by decade. In 1960, restaurants/hotels highest percentage of jops than others, peaking at 1100 but it then increaseed in steady increments to low of 2 times in 1994. after that, remained static for the next decade and reached at 1600. This point the highest percentage of employees all the tourism related industries. First two years, amount of sports and travel almost same namely, around 800 in one UK. Hovewer, in 10 years, the difference was one step and in 2009 it was 700 and 300 respectively.
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the rare of
works in
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turism
related in industries in one
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Unate
Kingdom town during 2
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decade


Over the whole time
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deriod
, the significance of restaurants
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claime
steadily
while
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sport&leisure
almost unchanged and travel
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&tourism
gradual declined in importance decade by decade.

In 1960, restaurants/hotels
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highest
percentage of
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jops
than others, peaking at 1100
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it then
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increaseed
in steady increments to low of 2 times in 1994.
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after
that, remained static for the
next
decade and reached at 1600. This point the highest percentage of employees all the tourism related industries.
First
two years, amount of sports and travel almost same
namely
, around 800 in one UK.
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Hovewer
, in 10 years, the difference was one step and in 2009 it was 700 and 300
respectively
.
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