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The bar chart depicts the number of men and women who choose yoga as an activity at a fitness center over a period of 35 years.

The bar chart depicts the number of men and women who choose yoga as an activity at a fitness center over a period of 35 years. 7WQNY
The bar chart depicts the number of men and women who choose yoga as an activity at a fitness center over a period of 35 years. It can be observed that the number of females and males who choose yoga showed increased rapidly during the period. However, women prefer to practice yoga three times more than men. Since 1975, the proportion of individuals who practice yoga has been just 20 percent female and 10 percent male. However, in 1995, the number of individuals practicing yoga was quickly rising, with women accounting for around three-thirds of the total, approximately 150 people, and males accounting for approximately 30 people. From 2000 to 2005, the number of individuals choosing to practice yoga increased. The number of women who practice yoga has risen to over 250. There are around 100 guys that practice yoga.
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choose yoga as an activity at a fitness center over a period of 35 years.

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20 percent female and 10 percent male.
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of individuals practicing yoga was
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accounting for around three-thirds of the total, approximately 150
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, and males accounting for approximately 30
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.

From 2000 to 2005, the
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of individuals choosing to
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yoga increased. The
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of
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yoga has risen to over 250. There are around 100 guys that
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IELTS academic The bar chart depicts the number of men and women who choose yoga as an activity at a fitness center over a period of 35 years.

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4 paragraphs
140 words
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