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The bar chart demonstrates the duration of phone calls in the United Kingdom divided into three different types: local, national and international, mobiles, during an seven-year period, from 1995 to 2002.

The bar chart demonstrates the duration of phone calls in the United Kingdom divided into three different types: local, national and international, mobiles, during an seven-year period, from 1995 to 2002. p8Wd
The bar chart demonstrates the duration of phone calls in the United Kingdom divided into three different types: local, national and international, mobiles, during an seven-year period, from 1995 to 2002. Overall, national and international phone calls and mobile lines accounted an increase of telephone calls. While, the number of local calls showed a fluctuation. The quantity of national and international call during this time in the UK was about 37 billion minutes in 1995 and swelled gradually to about 61 billion minutes in 2002. Meanwhile, mobile call showed the same trend. The number of mobile phone calls went up significantly from only about 2 billion minutes in 1995 to about 45 billion minutes in 2002. In contrast, the number of local calls hesitated over the times observed. It was about 71 billion in 1995 and reached 90 billion minutes in 1999. The figure levelled off and began to go down in 2000 and kept on falling until 2002 when the figure hit about 71 billion minutes. Nevertheless, the local fixed-line calls constituted the highest duration.
The bar chart demonstrates the duration of phone
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calls
in the United Kingdom divided into three
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different
types:
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local
, national and international, mobiles, during
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an
seven-year period, from 1995 to 2002.

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, national and international phone
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calls
and mobile lines accounted an increase of telephone
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calls
.
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, the number of
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local
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calls
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showed
a fluctuation.

The quantity of national and international
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call
during this time in the UK was about 37
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billion
minutes in 1995 and swelled
gradually
to about 61
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minutes in 2002. Meanwhile, mobile
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call
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showed
the same trend. The number of mobile phone
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went up
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about 2
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billion
minutes in 1995 to about 45
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billion
minutes in 2002.

In contrast
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local
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calls
hesitated over the times observed. It was about 71
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billion
in 1995 and reached 90
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billion
minutes in 1999. The figure levelled off and began to go down in 2000 and
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kept
on falling until 2002 when the figure hit about 71
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minutes.
Nevertheless
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local
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fixed
-line
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constituted the highest duration.
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IELTS academic The bar chart demonstrates the duration of phone calls in the United Kingdom divided into three different types: local, national and international, mobiles, during an seven-year period, from 1995 to 2002.

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