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The bar chart compares the actual and expected populations of three different cities, namely Jakarta, Sao Paolo and Shanghai between 1990 and 2000.

The bar chart compares the actual and expected populations of three different cities, namely Jakarta, Sao Paolo and Shanghai between 1990 and 2000. 2llxw
The bar graph illustrates the number of the realistic and predicted inhabitant in three different cities from 1990 to 2000 and in the future. It is clear that the millions of residents Sao Paulo was the highest position and the figure for three cities will decrease during expecting years. In 1990, the data of population of Sao Paulo stood at 17 millions people and it was double higher than Jakarta, while the figure for Shanghai started 12 millions people. After 10 years, the same trend was true for that all of three cities witnessed dramatic rise in the number of inhabitants, which was 12, 15, 24 million people respectively, follow the order of the chart. In 2000 in prediction, the millions of residents of Saul Paulo have been moderate fall to 22. The same trend have been true for that the figure for Jakarta and Shanghai have gone down the similar point at 11 millions people.
The bar graph illustrates the number of the realistic and predicted inhabitant in three
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cities from 1990 to 2000 and in the future.

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was the highest position and the figure for three cities will decrease during expecting years.

In 1990, the data of population of
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stood at 17
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and it was double higher than Jakarta, while the figure for Shanghai
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12
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. After 10 years, the same trend was true for that all of three cities witnessed dramatic rise in the number of inhabitants, which was 12, 15, 24
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respectively
, follow the order of the chart.

In 2000 in prediction, the
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of residents of Saul Paulo have been moderate fall to 22. The same trend have been true for that the figure for Jakarta and Shanghai have gone down the similar point at 11
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