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The provided maps depict the alternations which Happy Valley Shopping Centre underwent over three decades (1982-2012).

The provided maps depict the alternations which Happy Valley Shopping Centre underwent over three decades (1982-2012). Baad6
The provided maps depict the alternations which Happy Valley Shopping Centre underwent over three decades (1982-2012). Overall, it is obvious that although the territory of Happy Valley Shopping Centre appears to be modified to accomodate new facilities by logging trees, some remained unchanged throughout the examined time frame. Looking at the details, the area of shopping centre was enlarged by erecting the furniture retail after the lake being dried up, while the parking lot constructed in the space of the road and green belt through the tree clearance from 1982 to 2012. Meanwhile, the food store located the nothern part of shopping mall and three amanities (sport, electronics and furniture store) was converted into new electronic store and Themed restaurans, respectively. Apart from these replacements, the entertainment area situated in the centre, enterance, toalets and elevator which rose to 2nd remained unchanged, whereas the coffee shop and lobby area were demolished, with the new food store was put up in the south of Themed restaurans.
The provided maps depict the alternations which Happy Valley
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Centre
underwent over three decades (1982-2012).

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, it is obvious that although the territory of Happy Valley
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Shopping
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Centre
appears to
be modified
to
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accomodate
new facilities by logging trees,
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some
remained unchanged throughout the examined time frame.

Looking at the
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details
, the area of
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shopping
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centre
was enlarged
by erecting the furniture retail after the lake
being dried
up, while the parking lot constructed in the space of the road and green belt through the tree clearance from 1982 to 2012. Meanwhile, the food
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store
located the
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nothern
part of
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shopping
mall and three
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amanities
(sport, electronics and furniture
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store)
was converted
into new electronic
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store
and Themed
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restaurans
,
respectively
.

Apart from these replacements, the entertainment area situated in the
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centre
,
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enterance
,
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toalets
and elevator which rose to 2nd remained unchanged, whereas the coffee shop and lobby area
were demolished
, with the new food
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store
was put
up in the south of Themed
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restaurans
.
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IELTS academic The provided maps depict the alternations which Happy Valley Shopping Centre underwent over three decades (1982-2012).

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