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The given chart provides information about the annual number of rentals and sales of films from a specific store between 2002 and 2011.

The given chart provides information about the annual number of rentals and sales of films from a specific store between 2002 and 2011. pXGJ0
The given chart provides information about the annual number of rentals and sales of films from a specific store between 2002 and 2011. Overall, People are more willing to own films in different formats, such as VHS, DVD, and Blu-ray, specifically DVD format is more popular in comparison to the other formats. Consequently, the tendency towards renting films is decreasing year after year. In 2002, a substantial number of films were rented (approximately 200000), whereas the quantity of both VHS and DVD sales would add up to virtually 150000. During the next five years, people were more eager to buy their films, as a result, a noticeable rise in DVD sales occurred, where it reached its highest point (slightly more than 200000) in 2007. Moreover, the Blu-ray format started to gain popularity, and no more films in VHS format were sold in the same year. Between 2007 and 2011, the number of rentals dropped impressively (reaching nearly 50000 in 2011), also the number of DVD sales fell moderately (approximately 170000) and Blu-ray sales climbed slightly, reaching its highest number (approximately 10000).
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chart provides information about the annual
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number
of rentals and
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sales
of films from a specific store between 2002 and 2011.

Overall
,
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People
are more willing to
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own
films in
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different
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formats
, such as VHS, DVD, and Blu-ray,
specifically
DVD
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format
is more popular
in comparison
to the other
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formats
.
Consequently
, the tendency towards renting films is decreasing year after year.

In 2002, a substantial
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number
of films
were rented
(approximately 200000), whereas the quantity of both VHS and DVD
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sales
would
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add
up to
virtually
150000. During the
next
five years,
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people
were more eager to
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buy
their films,
as a result
, a noticeable rise in DVD
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sales
occurred, where it reached its highest point (
slightly
more than 200000) in 2007.
Moreover
, the Blu-ray
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format
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started
to gain popularity, and no more films in VHS
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format
were sold
in the same year. Between 2007 and 2011, the
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number
of rentals dropped
impressively
(reaching
nearly
50000 in 2011),
also
the
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number
of DVD
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sales
fell
moderately
(approximately 170000) and Blu-ray
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sales
climbed
slightly
, reaching its highest
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number
(approximately 10000).
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IELTS academic The given chart provides information about the annual number of rentals and sales of films from a specific store between 2002 and 2011.

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