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The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010

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The following graph demonstases the interest of Australian people in various age categories with constant physical working in 2010. Over all, it is explicitly conspicuous that the hugest part of the activity was done by middle-aged women. According to the chart, it can be seen that the least physical actions were observed among men about fourty years. Now, turning to details, it could be noticed that both genders after sixty four showed nearly the identical percentage of physical performances: around fourty seven percent. It is worthwhile to note that young aged males from fifteen to twenty four were more active physically at than females of the same generation: about 5, 1 percent. As is shown in the illustration, it is apparently seen that the femenine portion of daily activities were exceeded considerably than physical training of men.
The following graph
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demonstases
the interest of Australian
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people
in various age categories with constant
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physical
working in 2010. Over all, it is
explicitly
conspicuous that the hugest part of the activity
was done
by middle-aged women. According to the chart, it can be
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seen
that the least
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physical
actions
were observed
among
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men
about
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fourty
years.
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Now
, turning to
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details
, it could
be noticed
that both genders after
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sixty four
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showed
nearly
the identical percentage of
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physical
performances: around
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fourty
seven percent. It is worthwhile to note that young aged males from fifteen to
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twenty four
were more active
physically
at than females of the same generation: about 5, 1 percent. As
is shown
in the illustration, it is
apparently
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seen
that the
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femenine
portion of daily activities
were exceeded
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considerably
than
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physical
training of
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men
.

IELTS academic The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010

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