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The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

The bar chart compares the `proportion of various age groups of men and women who engaged in a regular physical workout in Australia in 2010. Overall, it can be seen that the ratio of females was highest in physical exercise except for the young and older age group. However, the percentage of the male was highest in youth, and older people were about equal in percentage. In the age bracket of 15 to 24, the rate of men and women started at 52. 8% and 47. 7% respectively. At 25 to 34 age, there was a huge decrease in the ratio of male to 42. 2%, while there was a slight increase in the ratio of the female. Then, from 35 to 44, the male ratio was too low as compared to the female that was 39. 5% and 52. 5% sequentially. With regard to 45 to 54 age and 55 to 64 age, the percentage of male in the former group of people was 43. 1%, and 45. 1% in the latter group of people, whilst the percentage of female was about same which was 53. 3% and 53%. Elderly people were stood at about the same percentage that is 46. 7 and 47. 1.
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and women who engaged in a regular physical workout in Australia in 2010.

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was highest in physical exercise
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of the male was highest in youth, and older
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were about equal in percentage.

In the
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bracket of 15 to 24, the rate of
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and women
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at 52. 8% and 47. 7%
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. At 25 to 34
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age
, there was a huge decrease in the
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ratio
of male to 42. 2%, while there was a slight increase in the
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ratio
of the
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female
. Then, from 35 to 44, the male
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ratio
was too low as compared to the
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that was 39. 5% and 52. 5%
sequentially
.

With regard to 45 to 54
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and 55 to 64
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, the
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of male in the former
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was 43. 1%, and 45. 1% in the latter
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, whilst the
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was about same which was 53. 3% and 53%. Elderly
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46. 7 and 47. 1.
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IELTS academic The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

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