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The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010. 56WRV
The proportion of Australian males and females, who did routine physical exercises in various age categories in 2010 is depicted in the bar chart. Overall, six age groups can be seen. The highest percentage of doing these activities in men belonged to the teenagers and youngsters, whereas, middle-aged women did exercises more than other ages. To begin with, the rate of men’s activities began from 52. 8% from 15-24, which is the highest percentage and this number decreased considerably to almost 42% from 25-34 years and about 39% from 35-44 years. However, this number increased gradually to almost 43% from 45-54 years and 45% from 55-65 years. Finally, it reached approximately 47% for more than 65 years. On the other hand, this number for women started from almost 48% between 15-24 years and it went up moderately to almost 49% and 52% from 25-34 years and 34-44 years, respectively. Also, it peaked at 53% for 45-54 years and remained steadily for the next age group, whilst it fell to about 47% for more than 65 years.
The proportion of Australian males and females, who did routine physical exercises in various age categories in 2010
is depicted
in the bar chart.

Overall
, six age groups can be
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seen
. The highest percentage of doing these activities in
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men
belonged to the
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teenagers
and youngsters, whereas, middle-aged women did
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exercises
more than other ages.

To
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begin
with, the rate of
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men
’s activities began from 52. 8% from 15-24, which is the highest percentage and this number decreased
considerably
to
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almost
42% from 25-34 years and about 39% from 35-44 years.
However
, this number increased
gradually
to
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almost
43% from 45-54 years and 45% from 55-65 years.
Finally
, it reached approximately 47% for more than 65 years.

On the other hand
, this number for women
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started
from
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almost
48% between 15-24 years and it went up
moderately
to
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almost
49% and 52% from 25-34 years and 34-44 years,
respectively
.
Also
, it peaked at 53% for 45-54 years and remained
steadily
for the
next
age group, whilst it fell to about 47% for more than 65 years.

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