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Some people think that hosting an international sports event is good for the country, while some people think it is bad. Discuss both views and state your opinion

Some people think that hosting an international sports event is good for the country, while some people think it is bad. Discuss both views and state your opinion XGPJw
The Line graphs illustrate the number of students enrolled, international and local in Australian Universities from 2001 to 2010 on the basis of totals and commencing. Overall, the number of enrollments of local students was much higher than overseas students. However, the commencing rates for both types of students were less than the total number of enrollments. In the graph, it can be noticed that in 2001, 20000 foreign students applied to Australian Universities. In contrast, commencing numbers were slightly lower(i. earound 17000) than the total applied and for all the years. Also, it can be seen that for every three years there is a 20000 increase in the number of international students. In the case of commencing numbers, they were always less than students enrolled in each respective year, and quite interestingly about half of the students enrolled. Coming to local students, it can be seen that commencing rates were always lower than the total enrolments and remained stable at 200000 with some fluctuations. However, the total number of applications was 400000 in 2001 and it increased rapdly to 600000 until 2007, when it remained constant over the end of the period.
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of enrollments of local
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was much higher than overseas
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rates for both types of
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were less than the
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of enrollments.

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applied to Australian Universities.
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were
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enrolled in each respective year, and quite
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Coming to local
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IELTS academic Some people think that hosting an international sports event is good for the country, while some people think it is bad. Discuss both views and state your opinion

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6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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