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The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010. 2N2k

The displayed graph is given information about the ratio of several age groups in between men and women who did the anatomical exercise in 2010. As an overall trend, a broad assessment of the data reveals that the female operations were higher than the male. Moreover, the number of popularity was 15 to 25 then not very interested in the 25 to 44 age group. Furthermore, the 65 and over old people have been almost similar done by their regular activities. Particularly in the 15 to 25 years old male significantly grew up 52. 8 percent then slightly fall in the 35 to 44 range to about 39. 5%. In addition 25 to 64 old improved the majority from 42% to 45%. However, it constant at most similar in the 45 and over age group. As far as an increasing number of activities was around 53. 3 % for 45 to 54 years old female. Additionally, to decline of 65 and over, to around 47%. finally, in other age from 25 to 55 was reached in between 47 to 53.

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