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The line graph shows the cost for watching films. The pie charts show the change in the percentage of market share represented by the three forms. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The line graph shows the cost for watching films. The pie charts show the change in the percentage of market share represented by the three forms. Oa3G
The line graph depicts the cost for accessing movies in three different platforms such as, cinema ticket, DVD, and legal download from 2005 to 2011. The two pie charts give a snapshot of the substitute in the ratio of market segment represented by, Go to the cinema, Watch online (Legal download), and Rent a DVD in 2005 and 2011. At initial observation, the line graph reveals that each trend significantly varied during the four years period, whereby the three trends show different figures and pattern. Furthermore, the pie charts illustrate that the proportion of market share in three types also disparate throughout the given two years. At closer analysis, the cost of Cinema ticket was just about 9£ in 2005, and it rose dramatically to just over 10£ in the second year. By 2009, the revenue increased slightly to just nearly 12£ in 2009, and the trend again increased abruptly to 17£ within the last year of this period. Conversely, the price purchasing DVD grew gradually from 6£ to 8£ between the beginning till the end of this period. Moreover, there was a sharp decrease in the numerous prices ofLegal downloads, which dropped from 8£ to 6£ in the first two years, and it reached to 9£ in 2011. The details in the pie charts manifest that the percentage of market share in Watching online was only 6% in 2005, and this changes 20% to just over a quarter in 2011. On the other hand, the market penetration of both, Go to the cinema and Rent DVD, dropped the popularity in 6 years intervalsimultaneously, and Go to the cinema eventually became the less popularity in majority in 2011 among the other types of market share.
The line graph depicts the cost for accessing movies in three
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different


platforms such as,
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cinema
ticket, DVD, and legal download from 2005 to

2011. The two pie charts give a snapshot of the substitute in the ratio of
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market


segment represented by, Go to the
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cinema
,
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Watch
online (Legal download), and

Rent a DVD in 2005 and 2011. At initial observation, the line graph reveals
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that


each trend
significantly
varied during the four years period, whereby the three

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trends
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show
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different
figures and pattern.
Furthermore
, the pie charts illustrate

that the proportion of
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market
share in three types
also
disparate throughout the

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given
two years.

At closer analysis, the cost of
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Cinema
ticket was
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just
about
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9£
in 2005, and

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it
rose
dramatically
to
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just
over
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10£
in the second
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year
. By 2009, the
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revenue


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increased
slightly
to
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just
nearly
The currency mark is usually put at the beginning of the number: "£12".
12£
in 2009, and the trend again increased

abruptly
to
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17£
within the last
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year
of this period.
Conversely
, the price

purchasing DVD grew
gradually
from
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6£
to
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8£
between the beginning till the
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end


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of
this period.
Moreover
, there was a sharp decrease in the numerous prices
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ofLegal
downloads, which dropped from
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8£
to
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6£
in the
first
two years, and it

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reached
to
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9£
in 2011.

The
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details
in the pie charts manifest that the percentage of
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market
share

in Watching online was
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only
6% in 2005, and this
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changes
20% to
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just
over a

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quarter
in 2011.
On the other hand
, the
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market
penetration of both, Go to
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the


cinema and Rent DVD, dropped the popularity in 6 years
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intervalsimultaneously
,

and Go to the
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cinema
eventually
became the less popularity in majority in 2011

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among
the other types of
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market
share.
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IELTS academic The line graph shows the cost for watching films. The pie charts show the change in the percentage of market share represented by the three forms.

Academic
  American English
21 paragraphs
285 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 5.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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