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The Bar Chart Below shows the most important causes of stress for different age groups in Canada. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main featres, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words

The bar chart illustrates causes of stress among Canadian for different age groups. Overall, people aged from 25-54 stand mostly overworking and lack of money or funds, while people aged 64 and above are affected by stress due to no particular reason and health issues. Causes of stress change as age advances: while money and overwork affects people aged from 25-54 most, 25% and 15%, they influence lesser and lesser in higher age groups, in age groups 25-64 and 55-64 are 15% and 12% respectively, individuals accept these causes as reasons, while people aged 65 and above seem least affected. However, no particular reason is the primary source of worries for individuals aged 75 and above, 35% and 65-74, 32%. Other main source of anxiety for these age groups is personal health 24% and 15% respectively. These factors seem to influence a lesser number of people in younger age groups though the percentage of individuals in age group 55-64 report all at almost similar levels.
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among Canadian for
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Overall
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people
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from 25-54 stand
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64 and above are
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affected
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due to no particular reason and health issues.

Causes of
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as
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advances: while money and overwork affects
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people
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from 25-54 most, 25% and 15%, they influence lesser and lesser in higher
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age
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, in
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25-64 and 55-64 are 15% and 12%
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, individuals accept these causes as reasons, while
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people
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65 and above seem least
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worries for
individuals
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aged
75 and above, 35% and 65-74, 32%. Other main source of anxiety for these
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age
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is personal health 24% and 15%
respectively
. These factors seem to influence a lesser number of
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people
in younger
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age
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though the percentage of individuals in
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age
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55-64 report all at almost similar levels.
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IELTS academic The Bar Chart Below shows the most important causes of stress for different age groups in Canada.

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165 words
6.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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