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The bar chart below shows the global sales of televisions by Supervision Incorporation from 1999 to 2012.

The bar chart below shows the global sales of televisions by Supervision Incorporation from 1999 to 2012. Drjp
The bar chart illustrates, the global sales made by the company (supervision incorporation) for selling televisions from the time period of 1999 to 2012. Overall, in 1999, most of the people used to buy television as it was more expensive at that time. During these years the sales of televisions sometime fluctuated in number of selling and increased throughout the whole time period. To begin, in 1999, most of the people do not prefer buying television because of the expensive and high rates. During that year only 10% of the television were sell out throughout the whole year. It remained same for some years between the 10% and 20%. By 2005, in steadily increased and more people preferred purchasing television from supervision incorporation. Moreover, in 2009 the sale of television decreased and remained around 28% for the whole year. By 2002 it increased and the sale of television reached around 42% of sale in that year. Furthermore, the company supervision made a second highest sold in 2011 around 38% of television. In the last year supervision television sold 48% of television globally and highest sale of the all whole time period.
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(supervision
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televisions
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period of 1999 to 2012.

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. During these years the
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televisions
sometime fluctuated in number of selling and increased throughout the
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period.

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television
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because
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television
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out throughout the
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years between the 10% and 20%. By 2005, in
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decreased and remained around 28% for the
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whole
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year
. By 2002 it increased and the
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television
reached around 42% of
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, the
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supervision
made a second highest sold in 2011 around 38% of
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television
. In the last
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supervision
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television
sold 48% of
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television
globally and highest
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IELTS academic The bar chart below shows the global sales of televisions by Supervision Incorporation from 1999 to 2012.

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