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The bar chart below shows the four main sources of primary health care in five countries in 2010

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The given chart supplied informations about four fundamental of medical health in five nations in the year 2010. Overall, specialist held the lowest proportion in almost countries except Atlantis. In 5 states mentioned, the two patterns of Molovia and Vatania were similar. It can be seen that there are many similar distribution in three first regions given. Atlantis’s nurse service and Brastistan’s specialist are both occuupied 14%. Besides, hospital clinic and specialist service were both account for 19% in Atlantis. Also, the percentage of doctor and clinic tools in Atlantis were similar with that number of nurse in Selenia, where was exist the same percentage in doctor and hospital clinic with nurse’s number in bratistan by 34% The highest proportion of primary health care in Atlantis is doctor service, which was account for almost 45%, the same trend came to nurse in Molovia and hospital clinic in Vatania. This number was followed by nurse in Vatania and clinic in Molovia with 39%. In comparison, specialist in last three countries made up only 4% each, they was consistent as the lowest proportion.
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about four fundamental of medical health in five nations in the year 2010.

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,
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specialist
held the lowest proportion in almost countries except
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Atlantis
. In 5 states mentioned, the two patterns of
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Molovia
and
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Vatania
were similar.

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similar distribution in three
first
regions
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. Atlantis’s
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nurse
service and
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Brastistan
’s
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specialist
are both
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occuupied
14%.
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, hospital
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clinic
and
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specialist
service were both account for 19% in
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Atlantis
.
Also
, the percentage of doctor and
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clinic
tools in
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Atlantis
were similar with that number of
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nurse
in
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Selenia
, where was
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the same percentage in doctor and hospital
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clinic
with
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nurse’s
number in
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bratistan
by 34%

The highest proportion of primary health care in
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Atlantis
is doctor service, which was account for almost 45%, the same trend came to
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nurse
in
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Molovia
and hospital
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in
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Vatania
. This number
was followed
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Vatania
and
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in
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Molovia
with 39%.
In comparison
,
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specialist
in last three countries made up
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4% each, they
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was
consistent as the lowest proportion.

IELTS academic The bar chart below shows the four main sources of primary health care in five countries in 2010

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