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The bar chart below shows the employment of all male and female workers by occupation in the UK in the year 2005.

The bar graph illustrates men and women employment in UK differentiate by occupation in the year 2005. Profession is classified into two sections like nearest to 20 Percentage and above 20 percentage than, below 15 percentage and nearest to 15 percentage. All the men of UK are Skilled trades which is 20 percentage however, women are lowest which is below 5 percentage. Moreover, the women power saw in personal settes Curred Administrative and secretarial which is above 20 percentage and male is nearest to only 5 percentage. In Associate professional and technical both male and female are equal employment which is 15 percentage. In addition, employment in Elementart men and women have almost above 10 percentage. In sales, customer service and personal service female had 12 percentage e employment in Uk. To conclude, In Uk most of male in Skilled trades occupation and female are in Administrative and secretarial occupation in the year 2005.
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IELTS academic The bar chart below shows the employment of all male and female workers by occupation in the UK in the year 2005.

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