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The bar chart below shows the different levels of post-school qualifications in Australia and the proportion of men and women who held them in 1999.

The bar chart below shows the different levels of post-school qualifications in Australia and the proportion of men and women who held them in 1999. n6b5g
The bar chart compares the different levels in terms of post-school qualifications between women and men in Australia over the period 1999. It is clear that the figure for skilled Vocational Diploma in male was by far the most considerable than others. It is also noticeable that the figures for two other levels in male was higher than female, except for Undergraduate Diploma and Bachelor's Degree. The proportion of Skilled Vocational Diploma was 90%in male and was only 10%for female. In the second level of female with just over 70% was Undergraduate Diploma and thatof male was approximately 35%. Again, the proportion of female in Bachelor's Degree was slightly higher with 50%than male (45%). Apart from skilled Vocational Diploma level, male was forward with a noticeably higher proportion in Postgraduate Diploma(70%) and Masters Degree (60%). The rate of male at the two mentioned level above was 30% and 40% respectively.
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in Australia over the period 1999.

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that the figure for skilled Vocational
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in male was by far the most
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in male was higher than female,
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Diploma
and Bachelor's Degree. The proportion of Skilled Vocational
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was 90%in male and was
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10%for female.

In the second
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of female with
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over 70% was Undergraduate
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Diploma
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male was approximately 35%. Again, the proportion of female in Bachelor's Degree was
slightly
higher with 50%than male (45%). Apart from skilled Vocational
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Diploma
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, male was forward with a
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higher proportion in Postgraduate
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Diploma(70%)
and
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Degree (60%). The rate of male at the two mentioned
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above was 30% and 40%
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IELTS academic The bar chart below shows the different levels of post-school qualifications in Australia and the proportion of men and women who held them in 1999.

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