Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

The bar chart below provides information about a number of different transport used by individuals to travel to and from work in one European city during the years 1960, 1980 and 2000.

The bar chart below provides information about a number of different transport used by individuals to travel to and from work in one European city during the years 1960, 1980 and 2000. YGdm
The bar chart below provides information about a number of different transport used by individuals to travel to and from work in one European city during the years 1960, 1980 and 2000. Overall, it is shown that all transport modes experienced quite apparent fluctuations in a span of 3 given years. However, it was a car and a foot mode growth in need, which was the most noticeable one, especially in 2000 and 1960, respectively. At the very beginning, in 1960, the percentage of people travelling by foot was almost 35 percent. Having been dramatically fallen to just over 15 percent in 1980, the foot transport mode followed a downward trend at the end of this period too. With regards to a year 2000, the car usage rose rapidly from just a little over 5 percent in 1960 to more that 35 percent. Moreover, it managed to outnumber a need in buses by a significant margin in approximately 30 percent.
The bar chart below provides information about a number of
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
transport
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
by individuals to travel to and from work in one European city during the years 1960, 1980 and 2000.

Overall
, it
is shown
that all transport modes experienced quite apparent fluctuations in a span of 3
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
years.
However
, it was a car and a foot mode growth in need, which was the most noticeable one,
especially
in 2000 and 1960,
respectively
.

At the
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
beginning, in 1960, the percentage of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
travelling by foot was almost 35
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
percent
. Having been
dramatically
fallen to
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
just
over 15
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
percent
in 1980, the foot transport mode followed a downward trend at the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
end
of this period too.

Use "in regard to", "with regard to", or more simply "regarding".
With regards to
a year 2000, the car usage rose
rapidly
from
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
just
a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
little
over 5
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
percent
in 1960 to more that 35
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
percent
.
Moreover
, it managed to outnumber a need in buses by a significant margin in approximately 30
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
percent
.
What do you think?
  • This is funny writingFunny
  • I love this writingLove
  • This writing has blown my mindWow
  • It made me angryAngry
  • It made me sadSad

IELTS academic The bar chart below provides information about a number of different transport used by individuals to travel to and from work in one European city during the years 1960, 1980 and 2000.

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
160 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • ?
    Include an introduction and conclusion
  • ?
    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • ?
    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • ?
    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Recent posts





Get more results for topic:
  • The bar chart below provides information about a number of different transport used by individuals to travel to and from work in one European city during the years 1960, 1980 and 2000.