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The bar chart below illustrates five different industries’ percentage share of Brazil’s economy in 2009 and 2019 with a forecast for 2029.

The bar chart below illustrates five different industries’ percentage share of Brazil’s economy in 2009 and 2019 with a forecast for 2029. P12K
The bar chart shows the actual and projected share of the economy of Brazil held by the five key business sectors for the years 2009, 2019, and 2029. Beginning with the real figures, the sectors that saw growth between 2009 and 2019 are Finance, Fossil Fuels, and Food Processing with rises of around 5 percent for the two former and around 10% for the latter. However, both Tourism and Manufacturing saw falls of around 5% for that period. Turning next to the projected figures for 2029, only the Finance sector is predicted to see continued growth in 2029, again by 5%. Of the remaining sectors, tourism stays at 2019 levels with around 21%, and both Food Processing and Oil, Coal and Gas return to 2009 levels (11 and 26% respectively). Meanwhile, Manufacturing sees a further drop in its share, falling by a further 10 percent to around 5 percent. Overall, for the period covered, the Finance sector stands out in terms of having the largest share of brazil’s economy and its share shows continued growth. The big loser is manufacturing, which starts as the joint smallest sector and sees both real and projected falls.
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the actual and projected
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share
of the economy of Brazil held by the five key business
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sectors
for the years 2009, 2019, and 2029.

Beginning with the real figures, the
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sectors
that
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saw
growth between 2009 and 2019 are Finance, Fossil Fuels, and Food Processing with rises of
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around
5 percent for the two former and
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around
10% for the latter.
However
, both Tourism and Manufacturing
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saw
falls of
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around
5% for that period.

Turning
next
to the projected figures for 2029,
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only
the Finance
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sector
is predicted
to
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see
continued growth in 2029, again by 5%. Of the remaining
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sectors
, tourism stays at 2019 levels with
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around
21%, and both Food Processing and Oil, Coal and Gas return to 2009 levels (11 and 26%
respectively
). Meanwhile, Manufacturing
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sees
a
further
drop in its
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share
, falling by a
further
10 percent to
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around
5 percent.

Overall
, for the period covered, the Finance
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sector
stands out in terms of having the largest
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share
of
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brazil
’s economy and its
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share
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continued growth. The
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loser is manufacturing, which
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starts
as the joint smallest
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sector
and
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sees
both real and projected falls.
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