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The bar charts show data about computer ownership, with a further classification by level of education, from 2002 to 2010.

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The bar charts show data about computer ownership, with a further classification by level of education, from 2002 to 2010. A steady but significant rise can be seen in the percentage of the population that owned a computer over the period. Just over half the population owned computers in 2002, whereas by 2010 three out of four people had a home computer. An analysis of the data by level of education shows that higher levels of education correspond to higher levels of computer ownership in both of those years. In 2002, only around 15% of those who did not finish high school had a computer but this figure had trebled by 2010. There were also considerable increases, of approximately 30 percentage points, for those with a high school diploma or an unfinished college education (reaching 65% and 85% respectively in 2010). However, graduates and postgraduates proved to have the greatest level of ownership in 2010, at 90% and 95% respectively, 20 percentage points higher than in 2002. The last decade has seen a substantial growth in computer ownership in general, and across all educational levels.
The bar charts
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data about computer
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ownership
, with a
further
classification by

level of education, from 2002 to 2010.

A steady
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significant rise can be
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seen
in the percentage of the population that
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owned
a computer over the period.
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Just
over half the population
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owned
computers in 2002, whereas by 2010 three out of four
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people
had a home computer.

An analysis of the data by
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level
of education
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shows
that higher
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levels
of education

correspond to higher
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levels
of computer
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ownership
in both of those years. In 2002,
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only
around 15% of those who did not finish high school had a computer
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but
this figure had trebled by 2010. There were
also
considerable increases, of approximately 30 percentage points, for those with a high school diploma or an unfinished college

education (reaching 65% and 85%
respectively
in 2010).
However
, graduates and

postgraduates proved to have the greatest
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level
of
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ownership
in 2010, at 90% and 95%

respectively
, 20 percentage points higher than in 2002.

The last decade has
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seen
a substantial growth in computer
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ownership
in general
, and

across all educational
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levels
.
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IELTS academic The bar charts show data about computer ownership, with a further classification by level of education, from 2002 to 2010.

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