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The bar chart below compares the figures for citizens who visited four different museums, namely History museum, British museum, National museum and Science museum in London over the 5-month period, starting from June in a year.

The bar chart below compares the figures for citizens who visited four different museums, namely History museum, British museum, National museum and Science museum in London over the 5-month period, starting from June in a year. Ykr6Q
The bar chart below compares the figures for citizens who visited four different museums, namely History museum, British museum, National museum and Science museum in London over the 5-month period, starting from June in a year. Overall, travelers tended to visit museums in August in the year. It is also noticeable that the British museum was the most visited in most of the months, whilst fewest people chose the National museum as their destination to visit. Looking at the information in more detail, in August, the number of tourists going to the British museum was the highest, at over 700000 people, whereas those at the National museum was the lowest at around 300000 people. The number of travelers having a tour at the History museum stood at 600000 people, more than 200000 people as much as that at the Science museum. We can also see that, the figures for sightseers touring British museums were above 400000 people in June and July, on the contrary, there was a significant increase by around 300000 people in August. Finally, those dropped by approximately 100000 people in September, with only nearly 600000 people and around 450000 people in October.
The bar chart below compares the figures for citizens who visited four
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in London over the 5-month period, starting from June in a year.

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in August in the year. It is
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was the most visited in most of the months, whilst fewest
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chose the National
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as their destination to visit.

Looking at the information in more detail, in August, the number of tourists going to the British
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was the highest, at over 700000
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, whereas those at the National
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was the lowest at around 300000
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. The number of travelers having a tour at the History
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stood at 600000
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, more than 200000
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as much as that at the Science museum.

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that, the figures for sightseers touring British
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were above 400000
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in June and July,
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IELTS academic The bar chart below compares the figures for citizens who visited four different museums, namely History museum, British museum, National museum and Science museum in London over the 5-month period, starting from June in a year.

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