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The bar chart and table show information about students from abroad studying in four English-speaking countries in 2004 and 2012

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The illustrations depict statistical data about pupils from abroad studying in four English-speaking nations from 2004 to 2012. Overall, it was apparent that the number of overseas students in USA was highest, as opposed to the figure of Canada was lowest in the first picture. Meanwhile, foreign learners in USA had the lowest proportion of the total student numbers, Australia ranked first in surveyed data. Glancing at the bar chart, the number of scholars in 1000s in USA, which occupied 155 students, was three time as much as that of Canada in 2004. From that time onwards, the former and the latter increase to 250 and 50 students, respectively. Moreover, the numbers of students in 1000s in Uk and Australia were exactly the same, at 120 in 2004 and still almost equal at nearly 200 in 2012. According to the table, the percentage of overseas students accounting for total number students in Australia was 19%, while the figure for Canada and Uk were slightly lower, at 5% and 9%. During the interval of 12 years, there was an increase in the proportions of foreign students in the Australia, Canada and Uk, with the figures reaching at 24%, 13% and 7%, accordingly.
The illustrations depict statistical data about pupils from abroad studying in four English-speaking nations from 2004 to 2012.

Overall
, it was apparent that the
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number
of overseas
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students
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in USA
was highest, as opposed to the figure of Canada was lowest in the
first
picture. Meanwhile, foreign learners
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in USA
had the lowest proportion of the total
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student
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numbers
, Australia ranked
first
in surveyed data.

Glancing at the bar chart, the
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number
of scholars
The article is probably missing here: "in the 1000s".
in 1000s
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in USA
, which occupied 155
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students
, was three time as much as that of Canada in 2004. From that time onwards, the former and the latter increase to 250 and 50
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students
,
respectively
.
Moreover
, the
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numbers
of
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students
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in 1000s
in
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Uk
and Australia were exactly the same, at 120 in 2004 and
still
almost equal at
nearly
200 in 2012.

According to the table, the percentage of overseas
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students
accounting for total
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number
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students
in Australia was 19%, while the figure for Canada and
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Uk
were
slightly
lower, at 5% and 9%. During the interval of 12 years, there was an increase in the proportions of foreign
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students
in the Australia, Canada and
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Uk
, with the figures reaching at 24%, 13% and 7%,
accordingly
.
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IELTS academic The bar chart and table show information about students from abroad studying in four English-speaking countries in 2004 and 2012

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