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The average water consumption in Australia

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The given diagrams show the information about water consumption in Australia in different cities and for different needs. In general, the largest volume of water is required by Perth and is used for the agricultural industry. Citizens of Perth consume about 300 kiloliters per property each year, which is the highest index in the graph. The second city in volume of water used is Brisbane with approximately 250 kiloliters per property every year. Adelaide has more or less the same indicator (230 kiloliters per property). Water consumption in other cities has significantly lower numbers, and the smallest index has Canberra with about 135 kiloliters per property. Water consumption distribution includes several areas, where the largest is agriculture (67 percent). Other segments are noticeably smaller – water usage in households is only 9 percent; water supply, sewage and drainage and electricity and gas supply segments take 7 percent each. In the diagram we can also see a segment of manufacturing which takes 4 percent. The smallest area in the pie chart is mining being only 2 percent of all the distribution.
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Citizens of Perth consume about 300 kiloliters per property each year, which is the highest index in the graph. The second city in volume of
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is Brisbane with approximately 250 kiloliters per property every year. Adelaide has more or less the same indicator (230 kiloliters per property).
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numbers, and the smallest index has Canberra with about 135 kiloliters per property.

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. Other segments are
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usage in households is
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9
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supply, sewage and drainage and electricity and gas supply segments take 7
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a segment of manufacturing which takes 4
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IELTS academic The average water consumption in Australia

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