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The statistics in the table illustrate how long a video advertisement is averagely played on the internet and how many seconds an internet user spends on watching it. There are several types of ads mentioned in the table such as public service, clothing, pharmaceutical, electronic tools and etc. The group which is longer among all is the one related to public services. They are nearly %75 of a minute long. The next two longer ads of all are mostly linked with purchasing an item, whether it is a car or a ticket for a concert. The length of them is almost half of the first one’s. They are only played for 27. 2 and 27. 8 respectively. The advertisements about clothing and fashion are shorter than the others by only 14. 6 seconds long. In terms of the amount of time the people spend on watching these online commercials the trend is scarcely different. Whereas the longest an user watches an ad is 18. 5 seconds for public services, they only wait for nearly 6 seconds to stop a commercial about a clothes or medicine. However, this is not the lowest. An ad about any other retail than those mentioned in the table can only attract an user for hardly 5 seconds. It can be concluded from the table that the longer the ad is, the more seconds a person spends on watching it. But it is not true of a few categories such as entertainment and home furnishing. Although the former is higher in length, but their share in average time viewed is almost the same
The statistics in the
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illustrate how long a video advertisement is
averagely
played on the internet and how
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many
seconds an internet user spends on watching it. There are several types of ads mentioned in the
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such as public service, clothing, pharmaceutical, electronic tools
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and etc
.

The group which is longer among all is the one related to public services. They are
nearly
%75 of a
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minute long
. The
next
two longer ads of all are
mostly
linked with purchasing an item, whether it is a car or a ticket for a concert. The length of them is almost half of the
first
one’s. They are
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played for 27. 2 and 27. 8
respectively
. The advertisements about clothing and fashion are shorter than the others by
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14. 6 seconds long.

In terms of the amount of time the
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people
spend on watching these online commercials the trend is
scarcely
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.
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an
user
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watches
an ad is 18. 5 seconds for public services, they
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wait for
nearly
6 seconds to
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stop
a commercial about
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a clothes
or medicine.
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can
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attract
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an
user for hardly 5 seconds.

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from the
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that the longer the ad is, the more seconds a person spends on watching it.
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it is not true of a few categories such as entertainment and home furnishing. Although the former is
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higher in length
,
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their share in average time viewed is almost the
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same

IELTS academic the average length of video advertisements on the internet and the average lenght of time viewers spend watching them

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