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Graph shows the different data of Asia, Europe and United States for using different entertainmets means over the five consequtive period. 1995 is significantly at the lowerside than that of 2000, whereas Publishing media was used a lot by most of the people for their entertainmemnt purpose, for all the three major land continents. To start with Television and Publish media, which takes the significant part among the most dominant media mode, Television was fluctuating around the mean postion of 50, for the period of five years from 1995 to 2000. On the relative side Publish keeps the increasing order everytime, but a delivation was reported in last five years, that was 1995 to 2000. Music was also seen as a good choice by the 90's people, but a constant little rise was observed, which was least in 1995 along Asia in contrast with United states. A very little growth was reported among Cinema and videos but can be assumed as a ignorable one. Taking a flash over the money spent, it was least in 1995, 67 hours only and 257 hours in 2000. Overall it was reported that United states was more to entertainment then other country, Asia and Europe was little backfoot to United state.
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